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Need help with marketing material
Phurst:
Bartlett's banner has us as Nukeworker.con not com. GE's banner I would elete Monster.com and replace it with 'other recuiting websites.' Same with NPPD. Last page at the bottom.- need more space between the Nukeworker logo and Tradewinds Research.
Media kit. A period after the first Nukeworker.com in your bio. At the beginning of the sentance 'Performed duties, you need a subject for a complete sentence. He has.....
Second paragraph first sentence...delete. Concentrate on who you are, not what you can be. It is too much like a resume and reduces your expertise to almost begging.
Need to better formatt list of clients and types of resumes.
Course title - Basic and Advanced exceptone says OSHA,. Can you fix that?
Need a final statement such as 'for further info contact' or ' We strive to continue to be the leader in the Nucear Field for .....'
Nice job overall. Wouldn't be bad as is. You are the man. and after reading all the figures, do I still need to send in my Gold membership? Yes, I know, I do.
Marlin:
--- Quote from: Rennhack on Nov 01, 2007, 12:14 ---Bio's ARE third person. You are talking about a person, not yourself.
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I'm not criticizing the use of third party just the volume and repetition. Perhaps break up the Michael's with CEO or "as CEO or as President". It’s a readability thing.
PWHoppe:
--- Quote from: Camella Black on Oct 31, 2007, 11:51 ---the first was the size of the logo on the front page, I felt that maybe smaller would be more professional.
I also felt that you didn't need the logo as a background and at the bottom of everypage as it was distracting at times.
The other item was the length of your bio, although quite impressive it could be pared down a bit as the focus is selling nukeworker. Great photo by the way.
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I concur with Camella's comments ;D
--- Quote from: Phurst on Nov 01, 2007, 01:34 ---Bartlett's banner has us as Nukeworker.con not com. GE's banner I would elete Monster.com and replace it with 'other recuiting websites.' Same with NPPD. Last page at the bottom.- need more space between the Nukeworker logo and Tradewinds Research.
Media kit. A period after the first Nukeworker.com in your bio. At the beginning of the sentance 'Performed duties, you need a subject for a complete sentence. He has.....
Second paragraph first sentence...delete. Concentrate on who you are, not what you can be. It is too much like a resume and reduces your expertise to almost begging.
Need to better formatt list of clients and types of resumes.
Course title - Basic and Advanced exceptone says OSHA,. Can you fix that?
Need a final statement such as 'for further info contact' or ' We strive to continue to be the leader in the Nucear Field for .....'
Nice job overall. Wouldn't be bad as is. You are the man.
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Phurst picked up the things I noticed and would change the items listed.
Great Job as usual Mike
Rennhack:
--- Quote from: Phurst on Nov 01, 2007, 01:34 ---Bartlett's banner has us as Nukeworker.con not com. GE's banner I would elete Monster.com and replace it with 'other recuiting websites.' Same with NPPD. Last page at the bottom.- need more space between the Nukeworker logo and Tradewinds Research.
Media kit. A period after the first Nukeworker.com in your bio. At the beginning of the sentance 'Performed duties, you need a subject for a complete sentence. He has.....
Second paragraph first sentence...delete. Concentrate on who you are, not what you can be. It is too much like a resume and reduces your expertise to almost begging.
Need to better formatt list of clients and types of resumes.
Course title - Basic and Advanced exceptone says OSHA,. Can you fix that?
Need a final statement such as 'for further info contact' or ' We strive to continue to be the leader in the Nucear Field for .....'
Nice job overall. Wouldn't be bad as is. You are the man. and after reading all the figures, do I still need to send in my Gold membership? Yes, I know, I do.
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Wow, thanks for all the catches.
RDTroja:
Just got to read them and they look great (with the above comments being noted).
I would also add that you have too many different formats for your lists... some are lists, some are tables, some tables have lines, some don't, some lines are evenly spaced some aren't... good information, just needs some consistency.
I would be happy to proofread the final copy (although Phurst beat me to it this time and did a good job) if you would like. As for the logo, I like the size of the logo at the bottom but agree that the background logo is not necessary, particularly since the charts are not transparent and block most of it out on several pages. I think you should make the charts transparent or eliminate the background logo.
But, overall terrific work and a great idea.
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