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GLW:

--- Quote from: gzeiger on Nov 13, 2014, 07:27 ---...... Any feedback is welcome.....

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you've done well,...

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MMM:

--- Quote from: gzeiger on Nov 13, 2014, 07:27 ---
Summary: Experienced Navy nuclear operator with leadership experience and sound judgment looking for a position in Operations.

Professional Experience: US Navy February 2007-present
Chemistry and Radiation Protection Supervisor (E-6)
- Supervise 25 employees in chemistry, radiation protection, environmental compliance, health physics, maintenance and training for two pressurized water reactors.
- Monitor operations to ensure procedural compliance.
- Exercise mature judgment to ensure safe reactor operation.
- Evaluate chemistry trends and determine need for corrective action.
- Prepare and review work procedures.
- Prepare response to audit findings. Review reports of chemistry analyses, radiation health, radioactive effluent discharges, performance evaluations and training programs.
- Efficient troubleshooting led to rapid repair of malfunctioning chemical analysis and radiation monitoring equipment.
- Recognized by an outside assessment team as the only shop supervisor in the reactor department to maintain satisfactory administrative records of maintenance.

Radioactive Materials Program Manager
- Process improvements reduced recurring generation of RCRA-regulated mixed waste by better segregation of regulated materials and minimizing generation.
- Streamlined engineering evaluation and disposal of radioactive waste by developing new documentation requirements for transfer of waste from ship to shipyard.

Nuclear Operations Instructor – Mechanical Operations
- Performed routine and corrective maintenance on electrical generation equipment, steam turbines and reactor safety systems to ensure regulatory compliance.
- Supervised operations during reactor startup and shutdown.
- Trained a group of 270 nuclear mechanic trainees and 70 officers through a 6 month training cycle in nuclear plant operations including maintenance, safety, electrical generating equipment, thermodynamics, fluid theory, engineered safeguards systems and personal integrity.
- Provided critical backup on reactor safety requirements on several occasions.
- Conducted and monitored drill scenarios for training of students and staff instructors.
- Recognized for outstanding performance with the Navy Achievement Medal.

Education
• Thomas Edison State College, Bachelor of Science in Nuclear Engineering Technology. Expected graduation January 2015.
• University of Puget Sound, physics and chemistry (no degree), 1999-2003
• Navy Nuclear Operator training, 3.83 GPA (class standing 4th of 287)

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If you're looking for an ops position, you want to focus a bit more on plant operations/maintenance. I'm guessing you're a surface ELT (based on the number of ELTs you supervised), so that might be tough. Also, put down dates for when you had your various positions. You can also break down your time in the navy by command. Finally (in addition to what Higgs said), I doubt anyone cares that you got a NAM.

gzeiger:
Yes, I'm on a surface ship. I'm qualified Chief Reactor Watch of course, but you're right that my usual watch can only be described as "operations" to the extent that I choose to involve myself in a monitor role. I do that quite a bit, but it's hard to quantify on paper. I left the qual off because as Broadzilla pointed out once it isn't optional, so I thought it would be assumed. Worth putting on there?

On the other hand, the operations schedule for prototype staff is fairly intense, and I don't feel that I'm inexperienced compared to others with similar military time. I'll try to think back to that more. Anyone been at the Charleston prototype know what specific items might be worth mentioning? I stood ERS and ESF Mechanic about equally, and did a fair amount of maintenance, especially on the ESF systems.

Here's what I don't know how to say: I care more about my job and doing it well than almost anyone I've met in the nuclear Navy, and I will bring the same level of dedication to my next job. How do I get that on paper?

Good to know about the award. I was wondering about that.

Please explain your comment about maintenance. I've done lots of things I could mention, but what kinds of things specifically would make someone stand out for Operations? I've fixed pumps and HVAC units, radiation detectors, chemical analysis equipment, overseen tons of testing in an RP role, done many plant cooldowns and heatups, written minor test procedures from scratch and compiled work packages for many things, but I don't feel like there's one thing I could point to as being above and beyond what I thought was necessary.

You're the second person to suggest breaking up jobs by date. My issue with that is that a good chunk of my time on the carrier has been an aggregation of collateral duties, some minor and some major, which overlap in time and collectively amount to an unreasonable number of items to list. I don't want to leave gaps, especially since when I write it that way it seems to imply that I had the later (better) job for a longer time, which feels dishonest, and I don't want to list irrelevant things either. How did you handle that? Or are you saying just put dates for each command? That could be reasonable, although I was thinking the radioactive materials bullet was something I did well and wanted to mention.

Here's how I would list everything I've done just at my current command (using Navy terms in this forum, obviously not on the actual resume):
USS Nimitz June 2011-current
Leading ELT December 2013-current
Reactor Laboratories LPO August-December 2013
Plant Chemistry Supervisor (plant LPO) May-August 2013
Workcenter Supervisor March 2012-May 2014 (concurrent with other jobs)
Dosimetry technician January 2012-April 2013
Radioactive Materials Petty Officer January 2011-April 2013
Maintenance technician (ELT) June-December 2011

MMM:
Since you only have 8 years of experience, you can list pretty much all you primary jobs. I recommend reverse chronological order (most recent things first).
Here's an example of how I would present your last few years:
-Leading ELT, USS Nimitz: Dec 2013-Present
(Add a couple bullets to describe duties/accomplishments)
-RL LPO (spell these out), USS Nimitz: Aug 2013-Dec 2013
(A couple more bullets)
-Plant Chem Supervisor... (be prepared to discuss how these are different from each other)
-WCS...
-Dosimetry tech, RAM PO, Maint. tech (I'd combine these, but that's my opinion)...

At this point add a few collateral duties that are relevant to the job you're applying to and add your 2 years as a JSI, then add education. Include the nuclear pipeline and that you have earned credits toward a degree, but don't list the degree until you actually have it.

GLW:

--- Quote from: gzeiger on Nov 15, 2014, 09:47 ---......How do I get that on paper?....

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You do not, that's why they have interviews,...

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